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Step #6 falls under the Second Part: Abbreviating Quotes, which is section of Task #3: Abbreviate.
Step #6: Choose one option.
- Option #1: Choose to keep the topic sentence and remove the quote and the follow-up explanations.
- Option #2: Develop a different topic sentence for the quote and the follow-up explanations.
- Option #3: Sort the sentences that appear to express the same ideas into sections. Think about the main idea of each sentence. What is the subject of the sentence doing? What is the subject of the sentence. Ask these questions during the process and provide an explanation for each section that details the main idea of each section.
Use this in-class activity as a guide for revising your own academic essays.
Table 15: Exploration of Option #3, Outline of Body Paragraph Sentences (Table Format)
|Sections||Main Idea Explanations (for Sections)||Body Paragraph Sentences|
|#1||This body paragraph sentence centers on a discussion of Elisa’s need to know what Henry is talking about with the two men in business suits.||Elisa continues to glance down at the tractor shed where the men where.There is an anxiousness in Elisa.|
|#2||These body paragraph sentences center on a discussion of Elisa’s work with the chrysanthemums.||Her “face was eager . . . mature . . . handsome; even her work with the scissors was over-eager, over-powerful. The chrysanthemum stems seemed too small and easy for her energy” (Steinbeck 221).Steinbeck paints a clear picture as to how religiously Elisa tends her garden. She takes off her glove and places her hands down into the soil. She recognizes that her flowers hadn’t completely bloomed.|
|#3||These body paragraph sentences center on a discussion of Elisa’s husband’s voice.||She starts tending her garden at the sound of her husband’s voice. At the sound of his voice is when she can start.|
|#4||These body paragraph sentences center on a discussion of the wire fence.||“He had come near quietly, and he leaned over the wire fence that protected her flower garden from cattle and dogs, and chickens” (Steinbeck 221).It is evident that the fence that protected the flowers was put there also to protect Elisa. It is also clear to say that the protection from the cattle, dogs, and chickens symbolizes protection from outsiders. Henry protected Elisa in the same way she protected her flowers.No one could get close or converse with Elisa.Everything had become so traditional that she had become accustomed to waiting until he finished his business to start her daily activity. Henry never included her in any of his business. She was best seen and not heard.|
Option #3 is a much longer process. It may be too long for a five- to seven-page paper. However, for a paper that runs ten to twelve pages or more, you will need this option. It is much more difficult to sustain the thesis throughout longer papers.
Rewrite the student’s body paragraph sentences.
Refer to Steinbeck’s work for guidance.
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