Figure 82: Essay Excerpt on “Chrysanthemums” (Squaring Your Analysis Exercise)

Below is an excerpt that falls under the comment “Analysis.”

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You may print the excerpt for class discussions.

Figure 82: Essay Excerpt on “Chrysanthemums” (Squaring Your Analysis Exercise)

Elisa, inadvertently, let the visitor through the picket gate.  She ran to her flower bed gathering the necessary seeds for the pretend woman down the road.  She gives the visitor a complete description of how to plant the seeds and the daily activity that goes along with it.  After he tells Elisa that it’s not nice to see the stars and listen to the quiet without dinner, ashamed, she is forced to find something for the visitor to do.  The visitor’s manner changes and he becomes professional when Elisa brings him two old aluminum saucepans; “Good as new I can fix them. . . . His mouth grew sure and knowing” (Steinbeck 225).

The keyword in this paragraph is “inadvertently.” The word “inadvertently” means in a careless manner; without intending to or realizing; not focusing the mind on the matter. I have highlighted the word by adding shading. If you are working from a hardcopy, use an actual highlighter on the text.

Group Activity

1) Refer to Steinbeck’s short story.

2) Consider Table 20:

Table 20: Assessment of Student Essay Body Paragraph Sentences (“Chrysanthemums”)

 Questions Student Essay Body Paragraph Sentences
 

Is Elisa doing this in a careless manner, without intending to?

 

Elisa, inadvertently, let the visitor through the picket gate.

 

Is Elisa doing this in a careless manner, without intending to?

 

She ran to her flower bed gathering the necessary seeds for the pretend woman down the road.

 

Is Elisa doing this in a careless manner, without intending to?

 

She gives the visitor a complete description of how to plant the seeds and the daily activity that goes along with it.

3) Rewrite the student’s analysis, removing “inadvertently” and applying an appropriate word that best reflects the ideas within the paragraph.

4) Include additional supporting evidence when necessary.

Copyright 2011 Regina Y. Favors. All Rights Reserved.

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