Chapter 8: Revising for Transition, Unity, and Organization (The Fourth Draft)


In Chapter 7: Revising Supporting Evidence, you learned the value of revising quotes, examples, and statements for relevance, which helps you to eliminate redundancy and repetition. Chapter 7 introduced margin comments on the subject of revising for contradiction, out of context quotes, and transitions.

Transitions are an effective tool for body paragraphs. Similar to the purpose of a topic sentence, transitions prepare the reader for the next thought, idea, example, or statement. Transitions help quotes become a part of the discussion, unify ideas, and organize the paper. Without transitions, the reader wouldn’t be able to understand the connection between perspectives, quotes, and other related essay sections. Transitions are so important to the writing process that as you write, you grow frustrated when you can’t remember why you initially decided to use a particular source.

Likewise, transitions are so important to the revision process, because your professor grows equally frustrated when she can’t understand why you are using a reference source to provide support for the ideas within the paper. Because transitions can be rough, smooth, illogical, and just all around make no sense at all, it is imperative for you as a student to consider the transitions you use within your paper. Without developing the proper transitional phrasing, the statements within your paper will appear incongruent.

Chapter 8: Revising for Transition, Unity, and Organization (Body Paragraphs) helps you with the task of revising ideas, examples, and statements. The chapter offers margin comments that help you to focus more on the type of sentence you are using to convey ideas. It is easy to develop rough transitions, sentences that lack focus, and syntax that is unclear. Throughout the writing process, we just write to get something onto the page. We don’t really think about the importance of using the right transitional phrasing. We organize the paper by using the standard five-paragraph model and hope for the best.

Only through the revision process do we discover how significant our ideas are to the papers. Ideas begin as sentences. Therefore, sentences must possess the type of structure necessary to convey an idea appropriately and succinctly.

With this in mind, unique features of this chapter are the margin comments “Unclear What You Mean By,” “Unreadable,” and “Winnow, Winnow, Winnow.” Explanation for these comments help you evaluate and revise transitional wording to promote unity and organization within the paper. Review the sample excerpts for more information. They will also help you understand the purpose of Chapter 8.

The comment titles below fall under the fourth draft. Click on any one of the links to access content.

Sentence Sense
Sentence Unfocused
Single-Space Long Quote
Unclear (Not Clear)
Unclear What You Mean By
Winnow, Winnow, Winnow
Wording Makes This Hard to Follow
Wordy Phrasing
Write Complete Sentences

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